You are neither alive ,nor dead. He says that despite the facts of ending harkon's "life" and preventing the blocking of the sun,you are not worthy of having a blessing from "the God of the Cycle of Birth and Death". You are one of the firsts that i see that not pain or draw his character in Nightingale armor.
Its not about show your skills of thief, its more like a "dark knight" costume
what if the real monster is yourself? Well, being serious again, i think it will be good some brightness in the hair. What do you think? I think the zise of her mouth is a little big, im not saying that its exagerated but i advise that you should re planteate her gestures a little.